Peer Revision:
by Alexandra Krowicki - Tuesday, 2 September 2014, 3:44 PM
1. Locate one or two key scenes in the narrative. Give an example of where the writer uses vivid description of the place and/or the people. Suggest areas that could benefit from more description, more dialogue, or the addition of reflection.
--didnt really see an "a-ha" scene when you realized track wasn't for you. There was not much description. Maybe say why you did not think you were getting better
2. Write out a time line for the key events in the narrative. What happened first, second, third, and so forth? Offer any suggestions for improving, structuring, or clarifying the timeline.
wanting to be like alli -> practicing -> Joining middle school track ->Practicing -> joining high school track -> Realizing improvement was not happening -> Making a decision to become more of a team member than competitor
Re: Track and Field
by Tristan Comer - Wednesday, 3 September 2014, 1:15 PM
1. Locate one or two key scenes in the narrative. Give an example of where the writer uses vivid description of the place and/or the people. Suggest areas that could benefit from more description, more dialogue, or the addition of reflection.
I think when you really get into the paper the scene of you getting announced captain will have more description and detail which will make it a better scene. Maybe add some of your team mates reactions.
by Alexandra Krowicki - Tuesday, 2 September 2014, 3:44 PM
1. Locate one or two key scenes in the narrative. Give an example of where the writer uses vivid description of the place and/or the people. Suggest areas that could benefit from more description, more dialogue, or the addition of reflection.
--didnt really see an "a-ha" scene when you realized track wasn't for you. There was not much description. Maybe say why you did not think you were getting better
2. Write out a time line for the key events in the narrative. What happened first, second, third, and so forth? Offer any suggestions for improving, structuring, or clarifying the timeline.
wanting to be like alli -> practicing -> Joining middle school track ->Practicing -> joining high school track -> Realizing improvement was not happening -> Making a decision to become more of a team member than competitor
Re: Track and Field
by Tristan Comer - Wednesday, 3 September 2014, 1:15 PM
1. Locate one or two key scenes in the narrative. Give an example of where the writer uses vivid description of the place and/or the people. Suggest areas that could benefit from more description, more dialogue, or the addition of reflection.
I think when you really get into the paper the scene of you getting announced captain will have more description and detail which will make it a better scene. Maybe add some of your team mates reactions.
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